Do it now （典型的现学现用啊）

March 11,2011, a disaster occurred (befell upon 上次和你讲Melinda Gates一文的时候刚讲过这个词，befall upon sb.尤指那些不好的事情发生在某人或某个群体身上 )in Japan. The 9.0 earthquake hit the northeast of the mainland of Japan, causally unimaginable （看不懂）tsunami swept east coast of Japan and some Japanese islets.(看看这句话有多少个of Japan和同义的japanese?) The essay “Japan: the disaster gap and the price of power” reviews what happened in Japan, and commends Japanese and Japanese government’s action when they face three catastrophes one by one. then the author wrote that （两个问题。一，在讲某本书、某篇文章说什么的时候，用一般现在时；二，wrote在这里表达很不给力。建议换成 notes/proposes/suggests/projects，这些词都有一定的表观点和立场的意思在里面，比中立的毫无感情色彩的write 强） we should take the Japanese nuclear disaster as an example (example一般指好的例子), and do not use all the nuclear reactors until ensure it can face accidents.（结构不完整） Building the infrastructure and strengthen aging infrastructure.（核电站和反应堆可不是基础设施。另外aging前面差一个冠词或代词） making sure that all Japanese buildings are well-prepared.（疑问：如果不看这一句，我就理解前面的we指代的全人类，看了这一句我才明白你说的文中作者用we特指日本人民）

After scanning over （阅读技能里面专门有三项训练叫skimming, scanning and skipping.现在明白了scanning的意思，还敢说自己是 快速浏览了这样一篇时文吗？）this essay, I doubt that do we really need well-prepared? （need to be） Shall we stop and wait for every arranged?(这是怎么回事？少了一半？) The best answer is in another essay I read last week named Do it now.

the man who writes do it now （引号呢？）really shocks （shock means frighten sb. to cause an unpleasant feeling. are you frightened or inspired/enlightened ??）me. It’s hard to believe an undergraduate could finish his two bachelor degrees in just three semesters. It’s harder to believe a freshman could think about jumping out from normal university routine. The reason why this undergraduate succeed (主谓关系一致？时态？) is” do it now”.

Yes, do it now without waiting, because waiting means you are killing your time. Yes, do it now without being well-prepared, because being well-prepared means nothing is creative.

High-tech is always dangerous first midst and last. The development of technique is worth the risk of life. If we always pull off projects, wait for everything is （to be）well-prepared, if we do not pursue our dream and do it now, human beings can never go one step forward. The industrial of technique is a risky business. Indeed, technique means death sometimes, but it means hope always. The most important is doing it now, and achieving humans’ dreams.

最后一段是不是和上一段有点衔接不当？或者缺少过渡？缺少总结全文的首起句？

提交的这版修改稿进步很大，但是还是有那些粗心大意的问题。

另外，casual writing 的要求是选两篇博客里面的文章来写，我知道你读了不止两篇，但是却写了一篇泛读书的内容。虽然你可能觉得那篇更切合你要阐述的问题，但还是算小小偷懒。

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